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Lets start off with what you have done well.
Your light value is your strongest point here. You have a lot of metal pieces that allow for the reflection of light and this plays to your strengths. You have obviously already developed a strong set of skills that allow to your firmly implement your ideas. At this point, you have overcome the main challenges of most artists looking to improve their work by having proper proportions and dynamic compositions. Since these are no longer an issue, let us focus on adding detail to your pieces to really bring out the personality of your characters and scenes.
There are several points that I believe can be addressed to improve this piece. To begin with, lets look at the forshortening of the right hand and the placement of the left one. I would suggest that the right fingers be enlarged slightly. The katana is a nice touch but it feels somewhat out of place. In order to bring it into the picture and connect it more solidly to the rest of the composition, I suggest that you place the left hand on pommel of the weapon in either a relaxed pose or a firm grip. This would require the canvas to be widened. This would allow you to show off the characters left hand and give the katana a sense of placement. This would also allow you to show off any jewelery, tattoos, scars, or accessories that the character might have on the left arm. The increased shadow on the katana would bring it to the foreground and would make it more solid.
As I said before, you have numerous metal pieces that allow for the reflection of light. I believe that the buttons on the right breast can benefit by having their light values sharpened. This would make them match the sharp metal top of the corset.
One of the things that I really liked about this piece was the veining that you gave to the skin of the character. This is subtle and often goes unnoticed. With this attention to detail, I would suggest in future works that you consider dust and dirt to the characters faces, as well as to take into consideration things like rust and wear spots on the weapons, age on the leather straps, and and fraying on the gauze.
Good luck on your next piece!
-Natterforme
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